99 Word Story – Feather

Gabe gasped loudly, Stella tracing the duster from neck to unbuttoned jeans…

Written in response to the ‘Feathers’ prompt. 99 words, no more, no less.


Gabe gasped loudly, Stella tracing the duster from neck to unbuttoned jeans.

“Quiet,“ she whispered, fingering his lip. “You’ve been a dirty boy. You need cleaning.”

Gabe nodded obediently. “Yes, Ive been so dirty.”

Desire coursed through them. Eyes locked. They burst into fits of laughter.

“Kiss your mother with that mouth?“ Gabe joked.

A feint but familiar child’s cry sounded from next door.

“Oh well. Looks like were sharing the bed love,” said Stella, kissing Gabe tenderly.

“Ill take the spare room,“ said Gabe smiling.

Stella tossed him the feather duster. “Take that, the corners need doing.“

Carrot Ranch – TUFF

This was part of the carrot ranch challenge to write a series of tweets all 9 words each.  11 of them to make a 99 word flash fiction.  I managed to get the structure wrong as it was meant to be just 1 sentence but I enjoyed tweeting it anyway.

 So I did all 8 of the Carrot Ranch challenges and it culminated in this.  You had to:
Do a 5 minute free write
Turn that into a 99 word piece
Turn the 99 word piece into a 59 word piece
The 59 word piece then becomes a 9 word sentence
And then you build the whole thing back up to a 599 three act piece.
I don’t remember a lot about it as I wrote it kind of drunk on Holiday but I do remember the experience being pretty cool as it really got to the heart of what you wanted to write.  Such a pity the drinks were all free that day.
So here it is:

First do a 5 minutes free write

Wednesday woke up and knew everything.  Everything apart from what had happened the previous evening (including who the fellow in bed next to him was).  His mind raced and his heart pounded as every synapse in his brain fired as the mysteries of the universe unfolded.  He sat up in bed breathing heavily as he understood the origins of mankind, who had killed JFK and why it was that the American people had voted for Donald trump.

He looked down at the man sleeping next to him.  “Not bad” he thought to himself, “must have been one hell of an evening.”  It then occurred to him that he wasn’t gay.  Not as far as he could recall anyway.

He thought for a moment about getting up but decided to lie down again as he realised how to cure cancer.  “Well that was easy” he said to himself as he struggled to piece together the events of the previous evening.  He remembered a few drinks, but not being drunk.

 

Now turn this into a 99 word piece

The light streamed through the window as Wednesday stirred.  His head hurt.  A lot.  Opening his eyes he sensed someone else in the bed next to him and rolling over saw a familiar face, still asleep.

It was the Barista from the coffee shop on the corner.  He liked the way he made an americano but wasn’t sure he liked it enough to have invited him to his bed.   Besides, he wasn’t convinced that his wife would approve.

Sitting up he rubbed his eyes wondering where she was and then, quite simply, he realised he knew pretty much everything.

 

Now turn this into a 59 word piece

Wednesday sat up in bed gasping, his pulse racing and a thousand suns exploding in his head. Where was his wife and who was this stranger in his bed?

Rubbing his eyes countless images flashed before them, and every synapse in his brain pulsated with a complete knowledge of everything.

Somehow he knew it all, everything known and unknown.

 

Then into 9 words

Breaking News: Man wakes up and knows absolutely everything.

 

 

 

 

Now build it back into 3 acts of 599 words

Act 1

Wednesday awoke with a start and sat upright in bed.  Bright sunshine flooding into his bedroom causing him to cover his eyes as his heart racing and a headache like a thousand suns going  supernova thundered in his head.  Instinctively he reached out a hand but his wife wasn’t there, she hadn’t been since the accident.

“Jesus” he said to himself falling back into the bed covering his eyes, he knew hangovers but this was different.  What the hell had he drank last night?

He wrapped the pillow around his head as the pain in his head began to grow.  His body tensed as wave after wave of pain began to flood over him.  Muscles tensed and sinews stretched and he convulsed as every synapse in his brain fired simultaneously

Through the pain he could see her face smiling at him and he could hear the sweet tones of her voice telling him that it was okay, that it would be fine if he just let it happen, that she understood why he had done what he had done.

Through gritted teeth he grimaced and shouted out.

“I can’t Emily, I cant I’m sorry but it hurts too much.”

“Just close your eyes Wednesday” she urged, “It will all be okay.”

“Im sorry Emily”2 Wednesday mumbled as the pain peaked and he cried out as he was overwhelmed and sunk into a dreamless sleep..

 

Act 2

When Wednesday awoke a few hours later the pain was gone and he felt an intense serenity. He could still feel her presence but the guilt was gone.  Nothing mattered anymore, especially the things he had done that he revisited in the dark of night.

His heart still raced but his breathing was calmed, and as he lay watching the late afternoon sunlight dance across the walls of the room he understood everything. Something had happened to him, something he couldn’t explain, but he knew that he was changed.

In those moments of intensity something had been revealed, a gift of knowledge, and the understanding of the universe was his.  He held a hand before his face and in that moment saw every atom of his being and understood the origins of humanity.  He watched the sunlight stream through the window and the mysteries of the universe were revealed.

His head to one side, again succumbing to sleep, he heard her voice calling to him.

“It’s my gift to you Wednesday, for what you did.”

“I’m sorry Emily” he said remembering the first time they’d met.

“Don’t Wednesday” she said, “Just sleep my love.  ”Sleep.”

 

Act 3

As sleep release Wednesday from her grip he stirred and felt alone.  He switched on the television and  watched the futility of mankind in their self-destructive pursuits.

“I can fix this” he thought to himself as he flicked through the channels, ”I can fix it all.”

“Are you ready to make amends” she asked as darkness fell across the room.

“I am” Wednesday answered. “I didn’t mean for it to end like it did” he said as he threw back the duvet.

“And when it is over, then you must relinquish all you now know.”

”And what happens to me then?” He asked. ”How can things ever be the same after what you’ve shown me?”

“Then you return to your reality Wednesday, your life, your guilt and your repentance.”

Wednesday got out of bed and pulled on the previous evenings clothes.  They smelled of liquor and cigarettes and an unfamiliar perfume.

“I thought I might start by curing cancer” he suggested, buttoning his shirt.

My entry in to the Carrot Ranch #7 contest

the challenge was to do 75 words on a murderous theme as I recall

The sausages sizzled and spat in the pan as the inspector sat to the table.  “Have you eaten?” she asked spooning fat over them and watching them turn from pink to golden brown “I make them myself you know”.

“Homemade?  Really?” he answered.  “They do smell great, what do you feed them?” He asked his mouth watering.

“Oh you’d be surprised what a pig will eat” she answered smiling “you can feed them absolutely anything.”

Carrot Ranch Random Words Challenge

107 words using ‘Acid Rain’. Easy enough right?

Wednesday dipped the nose of his tractor and sent her plunging straight through the heart of the cloud.

The radio crackled into life, “how’s it going up there mate?”

“Still early days Stella” he replied as the dash gauges confirmed he’d pulled in nearly three litres on that run.

“We need this Wednesday, everything depends on you cloud farmers.”

“I know” he snapped as he brought her around for another pass, heart racing.

“You got any quality readings yet?”

He held his breath as the sample data began to load onto his HUD.

“Negative” he cursed as the data finished loading, “acid rain, I repeat acid rain.”

Carrot Ranch Twitter Challenge

This was part of the carrot ranch challenge to write a series of tweets all 9 words each.  11 of them to make a 99 word flash fiction.  I managed to get the structure wrong as it was meant to be just 1 sentence but I enjoyed tweeting it anyway.

Omg date tonight with yummy coffee shop Barista. Eeeek.

 Oct 19

He took my coat, his hand brushed mine.

Lights off phone off show time. Sharing popcorn. Swoon.

rudely interrupted. Disturbance in the foyer. Police here?!?!

Getting the hell out of here. Wtf people dead!

Mum were heading home. Stay away from town

They’re everywhere. No way out. Police overwhelmed, finding shelter.

Just saw an old lady eating a police horse…

bitten. Hiding in Gregg’s bar. Scared mum, help!

He looks hungry. Worst first date EVER! goodbye…

Harvest – 99 Word Challenge

The deal? A ‘Harvest’ based 99 word story using the picture above with the word as inspiration provided by the good folk at Carrot Ranch.

The deal? A ‘Harvest’ based 99 word story using the picture above with the word as inspiration provided by the good folk at Carrot Ranch.  You should take a look, it’s a great space.


Henderson ran the pod through his fingers, pried it open and offered one small green pea to the blonde boy at his heels.  “These are peas son” he said eating the other.

Charlie looked up, opened his mouth as his father dropped it inside.  He chewed slowly then promptly spat it onto the ground.  “Oh Charlie they’re lovely” his father said and split another pod, popping one into his mouth and offered Charlie the other.

Charlie shook his head and covered his mouth.

“That’s okay” his dad said smiling, “I didn’t like them when I was your age either.”

99 Words


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Your lunchtime limerick 19/9/17

 

 

 

Harold

I wrote this for the carrot ranch 99 word challenge but forgot to post it.

I wrote this for the carrot ranch 99 word challenge but forgot to post it.  Its a 99 word challenge in response to the picture above.  You should check it out, its s rather good site.  Ill post it anyway, waste not want not…


Harold stood and watched the waves slap hypnotically against the shingle beach.

“Looks cold” Harold said.

“It’ll be fine” the voices replied.

One step forward, the waves lapping at his feet

“Do it” the voices urged, “do it now, jump!”

Two steps back.  No, this wasn’t the right time.

“Get it over with Harold, now.” They pressed.

Fear gripped, three steps back.  “This is wrong, I don’t want to do it anymore, I want to live” he cried.

He turned and ran straight into his father  “Goodness” he said, “It’s ok Harold, maybe you’ll get your feet wet tomorrow”


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Your lunchtime limerick 10/9/17

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