Dark Christmas – Donkey

My favourite Christmas carol has always been ‘Little Donkey’

Some interesting prompts over at Mindscapes  Thought I would do something a little different on the Christmas themes.

mindescapes Christmas Challenge 2017

I shared today’s post with my youngest Thomas and he came up with this.  Tom is 9 and seems to rather enjoy trying his hand at poetry.  Good work boy!

Donkey travelled through the night

On his back he carried heavenly light

The little heroes name was Kevin

And he carried the boy from heaven

 

Below is my effort.  I think Tom did a better job.  I’m going for a free form morbid nihilist first donkey perspective kind of vibe.  I think I smashed it.

What?  It’s a thing…Donkey’s can write poetry you know, they just don’t write it down because of the hooves.    

 

Long dark roads

Dust and despair fill my every waking hour

Family and friends long forgotten

We eat through the miles

We pass through the night

They rest on my back as we follow the star

 

No food no water no hope

Onwards they drive me

Through the night towards day break

 

Silver and gold spill across the land

Day brings scorching heat

I wish I was dead

 

 

Ive never written free form before.  I think it shows.

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Author: Michael

Husband, dad,(ex)programmer, comic collector and proud Yorkshireman. I have no idea why im here or why im writing but i rather enjoy it. no great fan of punctuation;

19 thoughts on “Dark Christmas – Donkey”

  3. You were awesome. Funny! Your son was amazing! So cute!

    I have a 9 year old also. She is now known as mini Mel. She, however is writing a dark tale. I little unsettling but very surprising good.

    Children amaze us in every way. I’m so happy to read your son’s little work. Adorable and quite good! Not so bad yourself! 😉

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  15. Wow! I don’t get on your blog for two days and you’ve got a bunch of stuff on here already! Always feel like I can’t keep up. 😉 There’s no comparing the two poems, as they are both completely different. Tell Tom that I love his poem and that I hope he will write more. I think my Auti and your Tom would get along well, as Auti is 9 and loves to wrote poetry too. Your poem is good too, really gets to the heart of that poor sad donkey. I think you need to send him on a vacation. Seems like the poor guy could really use a break. 🙂

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  16. Thanks m. I have enjoyed writing lots recently i must admit. They have those fabulous donkey sanctuaries maybe he need to go there?

    Tom will be really chuffed im.sure thank you

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