Should I regret this life well lived
when night time comes and stars look down
then I should surely reassess
and count the costs, repent the loss
to find the joy that like gold veins
runs through this rock on which we built
and lived and loved and spent our days
for these are all were gifted free
until like sand they run away
through fingers old and worn and laced
across our chests and unto sleep
This sounds extremely religious if you ask me.
Beautiful.
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Gorgeous
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A bit dramatic. I haven’t accustomed to that side of yours. Mighty stellar verses, Commander. I just wonder, what sparked the creation of this piece?
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Thanks Mel…:) just mostly scribbling but i enjoyed doing it
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Oh… Lol. I think I did this in my sleep.
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I see a book of poetry down the pipeline Michael!
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Thanks K:)
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You know U might just be right
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A whole different genre than the other book and why not? Go for it Michael
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Watch this space
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Will do! I encourage it.
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Wow, this is really beautiful
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Thanks muchly 🙂
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I love seeing older couples, their hair dusted with age, holding hands. Young love, sweetly romantic, doesn’t count the cost because they haven’t paid it yet. Love that lasts is hard: the armor rusted, the silk frayed but yet exquisitely lovely. This poem has that hard-edged loveliness.
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Thanks :). Your comments ard themselves quite beautiful
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