August 11, 2017

What has gone before

My crack at a 75 word piece on the picture of that rock up there for Friday Fictioneers


Before you I watched and I waited.  Before trees and ice and flame I was alone and the world was silent and time passed without record.

I watched you crawl into existence with so much promise, and I witnessed fleetingly your true light and the beauty within.

But having everything was never enough for you, and you were consumed by your desires and the darkness that lurks in your hearts.

I do not miss you.


75 words!  Boom!

Photo courtest of , c.e. ayr

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  1. Boom indeed!

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  2. I like the POV here. Well written too.

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  3. Excellent – this is exactly how nature and landscapes will judge humankind.

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  4. Wonderfully written!

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  5. That’s a lot of story in just a few words. But–why do you limit yourself to 75?

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  6. Seventy-five words were all you needed to tell your thought provoking piece. Neat!
    Click to read my FriFic

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  7. Dear Michael,

    Most of the time I’m not fond of anthropomorphic POV’s, but yours is so well done. A lot of story in 75 words. Boom! Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. You said more in 75 words than I could in a full page of wonderments! Excellent!

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  9. I always struggle with the 100 words and you say it completely in only 75. Boom indeed. Applause.

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  10. Fantastic! Mankind, overall, has been a disappointment and a tragedy to nature. Well stated.

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About Michael

Husband, dad,programmer, comic collector and proud Yorkshireman. I have no idea why im here or why im writing but i rather enjoy it. no great fan of punctuation.

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